Six word memoirs

Youngest of four children, great friends

starting a new year, 8th grade

Poetry responses to A life misunderstood and I have seen

I really like the Poem A life misunderstood by Sophie Roberts, Throughout the poem she has great imagery and alliteration, I especially like the line when she says "I feel squished by fingers as fat as sausages". The poem is great and I really get the feeling of disgust when I read it because of her word choices and how she describes everything. I also love the line "I hear gags caused by revolting smell" . I love this type of poem because it takes an abstract noun and makes it seem like its a person, and it talks about what that abstract noun does. I really like the ending of Sophie's poem because it really satisfies the reader and gives them something to really think about after reading the poem.
I also really like the poem I have seen by Tia Collins, She also includes great imagery throughout the poem, It is great and it seems like the noun that she used  was Happiness, because every verse has an event that are known to make people happy. I also really like how at the end of each line there is an approximate rhyme, I especially like the line when she says "In rain soaked earth a budding flower", I do think that she should change the verb used somewhere in the poem because she keeps it as I have seen through the entire thing. I also really like how Tia makes all of the lines rhyme but she manages to make them all fit together really well. Like Sophie's poem it had a satisfying ending and gave the reader something to think about.

Brag Rap

My name is Hazel T.
and I rap out with Glee
Cause' I am oh so free
It's better than being planted like a tree
ya, I'm free

Don't you look stressed
wearing that pretty dress Don't worry just confess
That I am better than the rest

You think you got skill?
Well, I would like to see
if you can serve a ball better than me

Here comes the white ball
Rollin under the net
you better get ready cause I'm about to set

Limericks

There once was a girl named Hazel who really liked to eat Basil
her salads were great
the ones that she ate
but it ended up affecting her nasal

There once was a girl with interior
who really liked her new mirror
she tripped and fell down
spread some dirt all around
but it ended up making it clearer

There once was a girl named Pria
who had a twin sister, Tia
they were the best of friends
but there came an end
when they fought over a guy named Aleah

Isolation

I have seen nothingbut the empty dark of night

Nothing, but grey nothingness

Trapping me, keeping me from the rest of the world

Won’t something, anything care for me?

I am trapped in a closet left behind, forgotten

Like your old pair of neglected sneakers

Wishing for somebody toopen the doors and let the light in

Yet nobody cares whether I am ripped or falling apart they just leave me here to suffer

I’d rather be the growing warmth that you feel inside when happy

That everybody loves,and cares for

They may take it for granted but they can’t live without it

Or even the perfect,plump, red strawberry at the top of the bowl that everybody favors over theothers

I have tasted the unwanted taste you rinse out of your mouth in the morning

nobody likes it but I am forced to live with it in my mouth all of the time

I have learned to live, to be unwanted

for all i am is exactly that

Unwanted.

Poetry response #3

http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15444
I find the poem To Brooklyn Bridge interesting because it changes from talking all about the city and about the lights in the city, and about subways and elevators to talking about caravans, Prophets and the prayer of Pariah. I wouldn't think about including those topics in the same poem. I really like this verse of the poem
 "Then, with inviolate curve, forsake our eyes as apparitional as sails that cross some page of figures to be filed away --Till elevators drop us from our day...." I like that part because., of how he fits in internal rhymes and assonant's in and they don't seem forced at all. I like the poem because it all flows together really well.

Then, with inviolate curve, forsake our eyes As apparitional as sails that cross Some page of figures to be filed away; --Till elevators drop us from our day . . . - See more at: http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15444#sthash.7qELT31B.dpuf

Then, with inviolate curve, forsake our eyes As apparitional as sails that cross Some page of figures to be filed away; --Till elevators drop us from our day . . . - See more at: http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15444#sthash.7qELT31B.dpuf

Then, with inviolate curve, forsake our eyes As apparitional as sails that cross Some page of figures to be filed away; --Till elevators drop us from our day . . . - See more at: http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15444#sthash.7qELT31B.dpuf

Then, with inviolate curve, forsake our eyes As apparitional as sails that cross Some page of figures to be filed away; --Till elevators drop us from our day . . . - See more at: http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15444#sthash.7qELT31B.dpuf

Poetry response #2

http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15647

In the poem descriptions of heaven and hell because of how he worded the beginning I liked how he described it and how he begins it especially. I am confused on how he knew he was in hell, when it said “the wave breaks and i'm carried into it”, I would think that he was carried into heaven, but he says that right then he knew that he was carried into hell. I don’t get how he  hears his father's laughter though, is his father in hell with him? I think that he may be, because after that he starts talking about what “irked” him, which was “asking what is beyond death?” his theory once was that love greets you and the love greets you, and the loveless don't know what to say.” I think it may just mean that since the loveless isn’t greeted by anybody they just don’t have anything to say.

In this poem the title is The descriptions of Heaven and Hell, but where does it describe Heaven? I think that he may be saying that he is in Heaven when he says “yet my father laughs, chest deep proving i’m wrong. we’re safely rooted, rocked on his toes.” I think that when he says that they are “rooted safely, rocked on his toes.” Since they are safe they might be in heaven.